Inferring to ‘Who’s the true enemy of internet freedom-China, Russia, or the US?’- Evgeny Morozov (2015), the author states that China and Russia both violate internet freedom since China blocks a few foreign websites and Russian laws made surveillance data being stored inside the country. However, the United State despite being an advocate of internet freedom, had demanded to obtain internet data regardless of where it is stored as long as it is handled by US companies. He also mentioned that many US companies' interest are the same as the Washington's and their cooperation threatens other countries' technological sovereignty.
I agree with the author that China, Russia and the US all violate internet freedom but the US is much more aggressive than the other two countries. China and Russia's restrictions only effect their own domestic users while the US is spying on everyone around the world as most data are processed by American companies. According to the US theory, they want access to all of them, regardless where or by whom the data was generated. It means that over 75% of data generated worldwide can be accessed by the US government since they are all processed by US companies, namely Google, Yahoo and Microsoft. The irony here is that Washington accuses almost every other countries on the planet of violating human right and lacking of freedom while it is actually the one whose violation is most severe and wide-spread. Such double standard makes people suspicious about American's agenda.
Also, China and Russia have valid reasons to do so. China and Russia are rising and their rise challenges American interest. The not so friendly relationship with the US makes their digital sovereignty much more important for national security. For example, China blocked Facebook and YouTube because some Ughur and Tibetan extremists used those two websites as platform to spread threats which led to explosion and riots in Tibet and Xinjiang. To fight against terrorists is the exactly the same reason that the US uses when it requires customer data from those companies. However, Facebook and YouTube refused to cooperate with Beijing in the investigation and claimed it was against customer privacy. There are also evidences pointed out by Mozorov that those American companies are actually providing data to Washington. I am not saying that the government has right to access personal data. However, when it is the matter of national security and involves many more lives, we may give the government permit to do so. As for China, it is only trying to reduce its citizens' use of American server since they are not cooperating. People may accuse China and Russia of being autocratic. However, the reality is even Brazil and Germany whose government has much better reputation and relationship with the US tried to get rid of American companies due to security reasons. Theses examples can also be found in Mozorov's article.
The even worse thing is the Prism Program carried out by the National Security Agency of the US. It taps into user data of many big American companies and get access to your personal data without you even knowing it. As I said above, we may grant government some right to access my personal data when it is critical moment. However, what the Prism doing is watching my every movement. This government is not even my own one and I severely doubt its agenda. The big brother is watching.
In conclusion, China and Russia blocked a few pages and force data to be stored domestically while the US is looking at everyone’s internet data. All of them are wrong, but the US is much more wrong and violates much more people’s privacy.
Reference:
Evgeny Morozov (2015,Jan4). Who’s the true enemy of internet freedom - China, Russia, or the US?.The Guardian. Retrieved from
1.since China blocks a few foreign websites and Russian laws made surveillance>> tense not consistent
ReplyDelete2. However, the United State>> However, United State...
3.He also mentioned 》》 mentions
4. China and Russia's restrictions only effect their own dome>>> only affect
5.According to the US theory, they want access to all of them, regardless where or by whom the data was generated.>> The US wants to gain access to all the data, regardless of where they were generated.
6.of violating human right>>> for violating
7. human right>> human rights
8.The irony here is that Washington accuses almost every other countries on the planet of violating human right and lacking of freedom while it is actually the one whose violation is most severe and wide-spread..>>>>no supporting evidence to prove that the violation of freedom
9.China and Russia are rising and their rise challenges American interest>> the rapid development of China and Russia threatens US.
10.The not so friendly relationship with the US>>> the tense relationship
11.because some Ughur and Tibetan extremists>> because Ughur and Tibetan
12.extremists used those two websites>> had used these two websites
13.To fight against terrorists is the exactly the same reason that the US uses when it requires customer data from those companies.>>> To fight against terrorists, the US also request customer data from these companies.
14. whose government has much better reputation>> governments have
15.get access to your personal data without you even knowing it.>>> gets access to
personal data without users' permission.
Content:
In general, it is good that you are providing many examples out of the article to support your idea. However, the examples are not well evaluated or linked to the article.
Language used:
A lot of direct translating from Chinese, leading to confusion while reading.
1. The original author's main point is included and he main points are clearly stated . The supporting ideas are good.
ReplyDelete2. The ideas are well-arranged and can be identified easily.
3. Maybe you can include a thesis statement at the beginning of the post.
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Yemin
Thank you for this effort, Zhenda. My first impression is that your formatting is a distraction (and the separation of words into weird bits on different lines). You are an engineering student, so I would expect you to be able to find a way to correct this problem. I can imagine that you would have to copy your text on a word document, correct the margin errors, and then open a new post, perhaps all the while using a different browser (try Chrome).
ReplyDeleteAs for your reader response's development, your peers have given useful feedback. To me the summary is a fairly accurate content-wise, with some oddities in language expression. Here is one example: "However, the United State despite being an advocate of internet freedom, had demanded to obtain internet data regardless of where it is stored as long as it is handled by US companies."
You present a clear main claim, though it can be altered for better expression: "I agree with the author that China, Russia and the US all violate internet freedom but the US is much more aggressive than the other two countries."
How could you express this without using "I"?
There are also some odd statements: "According to the US theory, they want access to all of them, regardless where or by whom the data was generated."
Theory? Where is this expressed?
In addition, you make some strong assertions (claims), but offer little evidence in the way of material from outside sources:
"The irony here is that Washington accuses almost every other countries on the planet of violating human right and lacking of freedom while it is actually the one whose violation is most severe and wide-spread."
Do you have source information providing proof of this?
In addition, you present some ideas that are unclear:
--- Also, China and Russia have valid reasons to do so. >> They have reasons to do what?
--- You write: For example, China blocked Facebook and YouTube because some Ughur and Tibetan extremists used those two websites as platform to spread threats which led to explosion and riots in Tibet and Xinjiang.
Where is the source citation for this information? You must reference your sources for this, even if it is from Mozorov.
Here are other points to consider:
--- --- Inferring to ‘Who’s the true enemy of internet freedom-China, Russia, or the US?’- Evgeny Morozov (2015)... >>>
According to Morozov (2015) in "Who’s the true enemy of internet freedom-China, Russia, or the US?", ....main idea.....
OR
In the article "Who’s the true enemy of internet freedom-China, Russia, or the US?", Morozov (2015) states that....
--- about American's >>> about the US government's agenda
--- evidences >>> evidence
--- No in-text citation information for the articles that you have listed at the end?
--- You need to more accurately cite info in your reference list!
I look forward to your next draft.